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2nd Person Point of View Chapter
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RE: 2nd Person Point of View Chapter
Senseito7 Wrote:It isn't confusing >_>

Well I forgot to mention that the POV changes in the middle of the chapter, here's the paragraph right before the 2nd person POV:

When he came to, he was lying in a stretcher, and three figures were pushing him away from the wreckage, most likely bringing him to an ambulance. It felt like he had broken his neck, but he could still move it around, although it caused extreme pain when he did so. He blinked a few times, trying to make his blurry vision clear, and when it did he gasped, horrified. The three paramedics seemed to have no faces, but when he blinked and looked again, they looked like normal men. Now they lifted up his stretcher and carefully shoved him into the back of the ambulance. Two men scrambled inside with him, while the third stayed behind to shut the door, then he hurriedly ran around to get into the driver’s seat. He flipped on the siren and accelerated the ambulance with a jerk, making Parrish’s insides roil. Turning on his side, he leaned his head over the stretcher and let it all out, his vomit splashing on the floor.
	
“Ugh,” one of the paramedics said, pulling his feet away from the puddle of vomit.
	
“Sorry,” Parrish managed to mutter, but then he said, “My book, where’s my book?”
	
“Wee have it,” another man said. “But you need your rest; you can read when you get to the hospital.”
	
That was the last thing Detective Parrish heard before he blacked out.


And here's right after the 2nd person POV:

	
When he came to once more, he was lying in a hospital bed. He looked around the room but no one was inside but himself, and after searching for a few minutes he found his book next to him on the bedside table. Something was drawing him to it, something in the back of his head was telling him that he must read it.

I don't know if that makes the chapter confusing or not.

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02/11/2009 11:14 AM
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RE: 2nd Person Point of View Chapter - S7* - 02/11/2009, 11:00 AM
RE: 2nd Person Point of View Chapter - theEvilOne - 02/11/2009 11:14 AM
RE: 2nd Person Point of View Chapter - S7* - 02/11/2009, 11:24 AM
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