beaner2k6 Wrote:yeah so my rough draft is looking just like an outline i woke up got clean then played god of war II all morning and barely started on my essay this is what i have so far:

General Layout: AXES, Persuasive, 5 Paragraphs.
Intro Layout:
    Quote
    Explain
    Thesis
    Summary
Body Paragraphs Layout:
    Argument
    eXample
    Explain
    Summary/So What
Closing Paragraph Layout:
    Restate Thesis
    Re-Summarize Weakest Point
    Re-Summarize Average Point
    Re-Summarize Strongest Point
Intro-Focus on peoples reaction to the bad news (no planes)
Thesis- Removal of a feature previously featured in the series will decrease the popularity and quality of the video game.

Fist Body Paragraph-

Second Body Paragraph-Why would it affect real-world

Third Body Paragraph-What is positive about the feature

Conclusion Paragraph


please feel free to put in ideas of change some things